He asks: “Will addressing Creator directly make this prayer for loving kindness better? Is it truly a prayer or is something different working here?” What can Creator tell us?

Your characterization is an accurate one, that this is different from a prayer in being more a wish than an outreach for a communication or a communing with the divine. The purpose of prayer is to foster a human-divine partnership, ideally, rather than a unilateral entreaty from a position of helplessness and a state of ignorance about what is possible, or a low level of belief that might not even support a divine response because the belief in our existence might be so meager, or the belief by someone praying they are deserving of divine intervention is so limited. But to not even invite us to take some kind of action to help these lofty notions come about, condemns the saying to something that can only be a feel-good exercise with no effect on the outer world.